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试写诗经体feeling good

楼主:帘卷荷香 时间:2017-03-22 04:47:23 点击:39 回复:6
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  最近林志炫翻唱了一首“feeling good", 歌词里通过自然之景,抒发喜悦情感,莫名让我想起了诗经。以前网上有人写过诗经体的绿袖和斯卡布罗集市,今日闲着无事,试着也将这首歌词写成诗经体:

  雀鸟于飞,日上太空。
  蒹葭拂拂,应知我感。
  一日伊始,其乐融融。

  鲲鲸于游,流水滔滔。
  花开灼灼,应知我感。
  一年伊始,其乐陶陶。

  蜻蛉蛱蝶,颉兮颃兮。
  夜宁以眠,应知我感。
  万物伊始,其乐洩洩。

  明星有灿,乔松有香。
  无拘无束,应知我感。
  大道伊始,其乐阳阳。

  feeling good 歌词:

  Birds flying high
  You know how I feel
  Sun in the sky
  You know how I feel
  Reeds driftin' on by
  You know how I feel

  It's a new dawn
  It's a new day
  It's a new life
  For me
  And I'm feeling good
  I'm feeling good

  Fish in the sea
  You know how I feel
  River running free
  You know how I feel
  Blossom on the tree
  You know how I feel

  It's a new dawn
  It's a new day
  It's a new life
  For me
  And I'm feeling good

  Dragonfly out in the sun, you know what I mean, don't you know
  Butterflies all havin' fun, you know what I mean
  Sleep in peace when the day is done, that's what I mean
  And this old world is a new world
  And a bold world
  For me
  For me

  Stars when you shine
  You know how I feel
  Scent of the pine
  You know how I feel
  Oh freedom is mine
  And I know how I feel

  It's a new dawn
  It's a new day
  It's a new life

  It's a new dawn
  It's a new day
  It's a new life
  It's a new dawn
  It's a new day
  It's a new life
  It's a new life
  For me

  And I'm feeling good
  I'm feeling good
  I'm feeling so good
  I feel so good
作者 :新青年1123 时间:2017-03-22 08:53:47
  这个有趣!只是其中的几个“感”字不太押韵,能换成押韵的近义词就更好了,如第一个可否用“衷”代替?瞎说一气,嘿嘿。
  • 帘卷荷香

    举报  2017-03-22 23:11:22  评论

    @新青年1123 是不押韵,但看诗经,好像也不是每句都押。(嘿嘿,主要是我不知道该改那几个字好,若要改,则每段都要改一个字。字荒.....)
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作者 :孤客独酌 时间:2017-03-22 19:07:43
  很有创意的尝试,点赞!
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作者 :月牙如柳叶 时间:2017-03-23 17:58:49
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作者 :野云先生 时间:2017-03-23 18:32:15
  一、二、四段可为:应知我衷,应知我夭,应知我狂。第三段不知其乐洩洩是嘛意思

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